DOL 25

Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable

Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land

Corrected:
#1. The Titanic once believed to be unsinkable, carried more than 1,500people to their graves.
#2. Because the student teacher arrives next week, it is necessary to finish reading Eliot's long poem, The Waste Land.


DOL 26

Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly

Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library

Corrected:
#1. Many well kown writers submit articles and stories, a renowned magazine.
#2. "I am very eager to read the French novel, The Plague," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library."


DOL 27

Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations

Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner

Corrected
#1. Everyone in this grade is responsible for this year's dance, therefore, we must all raise funds for the decorations.
#2. Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music and enjoy a good dinner.


DOL 28

Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet

Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing

Corrected:
#1. I remember when my neighbor set up a huge telescope, the largest I have ever seen, to observe Halley's Comet.
#2. Ms. Masayo asked,"Do you feel all right now Walter or o you want to go skiing?"



DOL 33
Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified

Corrected:
#1. "When are these books due Hans? Should I take them to the library?"
#2. After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.



DOL 34

Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain

Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier

Corrected:
#1. Much on whether you're affected by the high attitude when you climb the mountain.
#2. While half the class uses the Internet, the rest will study the Smilthsonian magazines that are different than the ines we used earlier.

DOL 35


Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft

Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming

Corrected:
#1. Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because everyone doesn't have a copy of Marie's draft.
#2. My mom likes Canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.



DOL 36

Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated

Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think

Corrected:
#1. "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal stated.
#2. The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for me and my mom.



DOL 37

Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)

ms paula jeffers
campton paper company
18376 river drive
minneaplois mn
dear ms jeffers

Corrected:
#1.
Ms. Paula Jeffers
Campton Paper Company
18376 River Drive
Minneaplois Mn.
Dear, Ms. Jeffers


DOL 38
Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy
Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew

Corrected:
#1. The United States Constitution sets out certain individual rights that we are all privileged to enjoy.
#2. We have neither the time nor the ability to practice the play because so many actors caught the flu.


DOL 39
Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner
Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29

Corrected:
#1. I had to finish my science project, cleaning up my room and helping my mom fix dinner before being allowed to go to the party.
#2. Mr. Corazzini, who never can start his car, was taken by bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.


DOL 40

Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico
Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry

Corrected:
#1. Luisa bought an antique pitcher in Mexico for her cousin from Atlanta.
#2. Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.


DOL 41

Sentence 1: park rangers who works in large forests periodically set fire to mark lands to encourage new growth.
Sentence 2: after the discovery of penicillin very man miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs

Corrected:
#1.Park Rangers who work in large forests periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth.
#2. After the discovery of penicillin, many miracle drugs appeared; though, ironically, forty years later bacteria are becoming more resitant to drugs.


DOL 42

Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination
Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests

Corrected:
#1. The differences between the eight camp counselors caused a change in the field trip's destination.
#2. First, Felicia planned the party, second, she decided on decorations, and third, she invited special guests.


DOL 43

Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club
Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found

Corrected:
#1. Does Juan and David's ownership of this Sailboat entitle them membership in the Winthrop Beach Yacht Club?
#2. The article "In search of Spanish Galleons" in the book Shipwrecks was written by Kiber and Rotondi, who believe the galleons will be found.